In many countries, the rich are becoming richer and poor are becoming poorer. Why is this a problem? What solutions are there to tackle this problem?

Nowadays, the structure of many
counties
a politically organized body of people under a single government
countries
is composed
from
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of
two levels of persons;
one
is rich and
other
any of various alternatives; some other
another
is poor. In
this
essay, will show the reasons of
generate
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generating
this levels
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this level
these levels
and how find a
solutions
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solution
? The inflation in the whole world
cause
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causes
increasing in life expenses without any changes on the salaries. All things in the life being expensive
such
as education, treatment; in universities the prices study hours
raised specially
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raised, especially
raised especially
in the privet ones so, the responsibility of the government to work to increase the minimum salaries to the level can all people buy the essential
thing s
any movable possession (especially articles of clothing)
things
also
living satisfy.
In addition
, provide health
insurance which
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insurance, which
is considering
one
or the important
facilities
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facility
that should serve to all citizens. The fair is very important matter; the absence of it make the rich
one
richer
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rich
and the poor
one
poorer.
As a result
of Appling the law equally, all persons
takes
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take
all rights
also
the society become consist of three layers; rich, moderate rich, poor people
whearse
of which person?
whose
presence the law
contribute
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contributes
in
tackle
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tackling
all kinds of corruption in administration
as a result
develop the countries in many fields. To conclude, we
should to cooperate
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should cooperate
to toward the corruption and ask governments about all our rights because at the
end we
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end, we
are is the main stone in
this
problem.
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