QUESTION; In recent years, many small local shops have closed because customers travel to large shopping centers or malls to do their shipping. Is this a positive or a negative development? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your knowledge or experience.

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These days, people journey to big malls and centres to shop, resulting in the closure of small businesses. From my point of view,

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is a negative development.

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essay, will discuss the reasons why I believe so. The reason I feel that shopping in large malls

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of the small ones is not

ideal is

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ideal, is

because it will affect the growth of the small and medium enterprises (SMEs). These SMEs are vital for economic growth in any country and as

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closure of small businesses will greatly affect the economy.

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, the Nigerian government recognizes the role of small businesses and as

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, is investing heavily in them by sponsoring individuals who have great business ideas but lack the funds to establish them.

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, when customers go to large shopping centres, they encourage monopoly by the big businesses since there

are

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almost no competition for the big malls.

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, when Shoprite was established in Enugu city, many small businesses closed up because people preferred to go

shop

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shopping

in Shoprite rather than the small shops near them.

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, Shoprite gained monopoly since they became the only mall in the town. Another reason for my opinion is that,

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the closure

of small businesses leads to unemployment. These small businesses help reduce

national unemployment rate but

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the national unemployment rate, but

the national unemployment rate but

when they are no more in business, many people lose their jobs and

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, become unemployed. In

conclusion

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conclusion, therefore

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, I feel people should patronize

small business

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small businesses

a small business

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of the large shops because the benefits to the society are enormous, as discusses above.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 5.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 5.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.5

Complete response

4.5

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

5 paragraphs

257 words

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QUESTION; In recent years, many small local shops have closed because customers travel to large shopping centers or malls to do their shipping. Is this a positive or a negative development? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your knowledge or experience.

Fully explain your ideas

Some children spend hours every day on their smartphones. Why is this the case? Do you think this is a positive or a negative development?

In some societies, the number of crimes committed by teenagers is growing. Some people think that regardless of age, teenagers who commit major crimes should receive adult punishments. To what extent do you agree

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Some people believe that handwriting is no longer useful in the modern world and should not be taught in schools. To what extent do you agree or disagree?