QUESTION; In recent years, many small local shops have closed because customers travel to large shopping centers or malls to do their shipping. Is this a positive or a negative development? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your knowledge or experience.

These days, people journey to big malls and centres to shop, resulting in the closure of small businesses. From my point of view,
this
is a negative development.
This
essay, will discuss the reasons why I believe so. The reason I feel that shopping in large malls
instead
of the small ones is not
ideal is
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ideal, is
because it will affect the growth of the small and medium enterprises (SMEs). These SMEs are vital for economic growth in any country and as
such
closure of small businesses will greatly affect the economy.
For example
, the Nigerian government recognizes the role of small businesses and as
such
, is investing heavily in them by sponsoring individuals who have great business ideas but lack the funds to establish them.
Secondly
, when customers go to large shopping centres, they encourage monopoly by the big businesses since there
are
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is
almost no competition for the big malls.
For example
, when Shoprite was established in Enugu city, many small businesses closed up because people preferred to go
shop
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shopping
in Shoprite rather than the small shops near them.
Consequently
, Shoprite gained monopoly since they became the only mall in the town. Another reason for my opinion is that,
closure
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the closure
of small businesses leads to unemployment. These small businesses help reduce
national unemployment rate but
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the national unemployment rate, but
the national unemployment rate but
when they are no more in business, many people lose their jobs and
thus
, become unemployed. In
conclusion
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conclusion, therefore
therefore
, I feel people should patronize
small business
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small businesses
a small business
instead
of the large shops because the benefits to the society are enormous, as discusses above.
Submitted by chinnynenye on

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