Some people become famous when they are at a young age. Do you think this is positive or negative?

Nowadays, many young people become popular owing to many reasons. But the publicity in
this
youth age may be positive or negative effects on the person himself. The most bright thing if the young people have invented something useful; the popularity
support
Suggestion
supports
those people, encourage them on giving and give others power to be creative and innovated
.
Accept space
.
in
Suggestion
In
addition, many people in present days being famous caused by developing the technology and a broad social network using, which help them to express themselves and show their ideas and interests; mean
awhile
Suggestion
a while
, it is
source
Suggestion
a source
the source
of
money
to help them
of
Suggestion
to
shape their future and support their families. To illustrate that, famous
youtubers
take
money
from Google Company if they collect a certain
numbers
Suggestion
number
of likes. The negative aspect is; the famous word related to wealth, some young people according to their age are exploited by others because of their
money
of position.
Moreover
, the richness of young people, may change their thoughts and force some of them to leave his/her study or family, especially in countries which are the young who reach 18 years he/she free and responsible about himself
also
when they become rich the find out a ways to spend the
money
which is may
fall
undergo an emotional sensation or be in a particular state of mind
feel
them in
drugs
Suggestion
drug
addiction. In conclusion
,
Accept space
,
I believe the popularity in youth age is negative if not controlled our sons and
dirct
command with authority
direct
directs
directed
them to the right road
.
Accept space
.
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