Present a written argument or case to an educated reader with no specialist knowledge of the following topic: There are many different types of music in the world today. Why do we need music? Is the traditional music of a country more important than the International music that is heard everywhere nowadays?

Nowadays, there are different
type
of
music
in the world and each
music
have some meanings
such
as devotional
music
shows the individual's religion and reverence and traditional
music
shows the nationality and patriotism. I strongly agree that
traditional
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the traditional music
music
of a
country
more important than the international
music
because
this
type
of songs represents our nation very well. To embark, I believe that
music
plays a vital role in everyone's life because we need
such
type
of
music
like rocking, romantic,
melodeous
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melodic
melodious
melodies
, devotional, traditional etc.
for
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For
relaxation.
Music
is paramount for dancing,
for example
, if there is no
music
around us, so we can not feel it and absorb it for dancing.
Music
is very important for motivation, entertainment, relaxation etc.
For example
, a person who goes to the gym everyday needs some songs to motivate. Nowadays,
music
is beneficial for career making. I think it is good to have traditional
music
of a
country
because there is a need
of
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for
this
type
of
music
because sometimes
music
represents nature, culture and society etc. For illustration, in sports,
olympic
of or relating to the Olympic Games
Olympic
games, and other occasions, traditional
music
is played
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are played
of winning
country
,
furthermore
, it
plays
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is played
in cinema halls
also
, when the movie starts, so it is essential for a
country
to have these songs.
However
, it is generally believed that International
music
is
also
important because it enhances the knowledge and awareness of
individual
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the individual
individuals
and we know the culture and society of different
country
by International
music but
Accept comma addition
music, but
I disagree with them because I think traditional
music
is more important than other
music
because it shows patriotism. To sum up, every
country
should have some traditional
music
because
by
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of
this
, they easily represent their countries.

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