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Some people believe that air travel should be restricted because it causes serious pollution and uses up the world’s fuel resources. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Air
travel
 has always been
peoples' best choice
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the peoples' best choice
 of transportation and has from time gained popularity. Some people
feels
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feel
 that it should be confined
as a result
 of
air
 contamination it causes and the world's fuel it consumes.
This
 essay will argue why
air
travel
 is the best among others and not to be restricted for
such
 reasons.
First
 and foremost, the belief of placing restriction on
air
travel
 due to the pollution it causes and the word's fuel it consumes, considering the increasing no of aircraft,
for instance
, travelling
on
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by
air
, on
daily basis
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a daily basis
 all over the world and the emissions released
in to
expresses motion to a point on, or within, something
into
 the
air
,
this
 in return contributes adversely to health problems and global warming.
Moreover
, the fuel consumed by these aircraft involves a lot of money by the company,
therefore
,
this
 made its cost higher than other means of transportation.
As a result
 of these, restricting
air
travel
 can be considered. Meanwhile, when it comes to meeting up with time and convenience,
air
travel
 is, perhaps, the best. Reason being that, it moves in the
air
 without any traffic jam, bad road, security threat, environmental pollution and much more. A very good example of
this
 is, when I was to attend a seminar in Abuja, Nigeria, it took me just 50 minutes from
Lagos which
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Lagos, which
invarably
without variation or change, in every case
invariably
, I could have spent about 10 hours on the road. For these reasons,
air
travel
 should not be confined. Summarily,
this
 essay argued why
air
travel
 is the best among other means of transportation. I am of the opinion that, it is obviously the best because it is faster and convenient despite
it's
of a thing, of it; possessive form of "it"
its
 cost among others.
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