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University students are increasingly studying abroad as part of their studies.Do the advantages of studying abroad outweigh the disadvantages

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Recently there has been an increase in the trend of students studying overseas as part of their
degrees
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degree
. Despite the high
cost
 of tuition
,
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,
the quality of education abroad is more advanced. In my opinion studying abroad is far more rewarding and will benefit the individual despite the
cost
 implications. The major advantage of studying in a foreign land is that the quality of education is more advanced and stand to learn a lot as
compare
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compared
 to what is obtainable in their country.
This
 is possible because foreign universities have advanced technological tools for learning and students are more exposed to research materials.
For
example doctors
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example, doctors
 who do their residency program in Russia have more exposure and
better experience
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a better experience
 because
sophisticated equipment
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the sophisticated equipment
 makes them better expatriate in the chosen field of specialization.
This
 in-depth does not just benefit the individual
intelectualy but
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intellectually, but
intellectually but
intellectual but
intellectuals but
also
 makes excel in their career. The main challenge of studying in a
foriegn
of concern to or concerning the affairs of other nations (other than your own)
foreign
 is the
cost
 of tuition
in
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at
 tertiary institutions, which is most times ten times higher than what they would pay in their country.
For
instance when
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instance, when
 I went to India to in pursuit of my master degree, I paid ten
time
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times
 as a foreigner as compared to
indigene
originating where it is found
indigenous
.
In addition
 to
high
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the high cost
cost
 of fees, the
cost
 of living is
also
 very expensive.
This
 made me take up a part time job so I could could assist my parent in paying the fees and settling bills for my day to day needs. The number of students studying abroad as part of their
degrees
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degree
.
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.
is
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Is
 on the increase. Despite the high
cost
 implications, the reward of studying overseas is worth it.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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