More dad's are staying at home looking after children.is this a positive or negative development.

In present times
,
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,
more and more women have become
breadwinner
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the breadwinner
a breadwinner
for their family while their husbands choose to stay at home looking after kids.In my opinion,
this
is a negative development due to its detrimental effects on growth of a newly born
child
and
also
increased societal pressure for
father
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a father
.
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.
Firstly
, mothers as a breadwinner in the family puts tremendous pressure on them to earn the livelihood. Since they are the only one to earn in the family,
its
it is
it's
very difficult for them to handle tough times in the family
such
as
birth
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the birth
of a new born baby.
Although
,
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,
they can avail maternity leave, but they have to soon resume their work in order to handle family responsibilities.
Furthermore
,
new born
recently born
newborn
babies need a special care and emotional connection in the starting
days which
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days, which
can only be fulfilled by mothers.
Consequently
,
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,
it will have a negative effect on the development of a
child
.
For example
,
Accept space
,
a recent study conducted by a
child
care
center
an area that is approximately central within some larger region
centre
presents that
new born
recently born
newborn
babies are likely to get free from any disease after their birth when they spend enormous time with theory mothers.
Moreover
,
results
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the results
of the reversal of natural roles, which is staying at home for the mother and handling household responsibilities for the father, can sometimes be counterproductive.
This
is because financial dependency of men on their wives in the family can hit their self-esteem, resulting
into
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in
a disturbed harmony between the family members.
Also
, it will have a bad impact on society as
society
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a society
will take it as the
incapabilitty
lack of potential for development
incapability
of man to earn money. In conclusion
,
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,
while mothers can handle the financial responsibilities of a family
by
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of
their own, it can sometimes be stressful for them and
also
it has a bad impact on
newly born
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the newly born child
child
which
can not
can not
cannot
be overlooked.

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