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Some people believe that residents are responsible for the place where they live to be clean and tidy. Others believes that government is responsible for it. Discuss both view and give your opinion.

#people #residents #place #government
Recently, there are campaigns
from
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for
of
 the non-profit organization placing emphasis about the cleanliness of the
neighborhood
a surrounding or nearby region
neighbourhood
 and apartments. It is believed that the house owners should manage their
place
 in a conducive state.
However
, some refute to that notion and stated that the
government
 should be the one plays the part
to
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of
 the sanitation of
surrounding
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the surrounding neighbourhood
surrounding neighbourhood
surrounding neighbourhoods
neighborhood
. In my opinion, the cleanness of the
place
 completely depends on the resident as the
government
 could not always monitor the
place
. In
this
 essay, both of these
notions
a politically organized body of people under a single government
nations
 will be discussed.
Firstly
, the responsibility of keeping the surrounding of the
neighborhood
a surrounding or nearby region
neighbourhood
 neat and tidy is dependent on how the owner takes care of it.
This
 is because, they are the ones who spends most their time at their house and
therefore
 they knew more
of
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about
 the do’s and
don’ts
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Don’ts
 of their surroundings.
Besides
 that, ensuring the
place
 will definitely keep out of the harmful infection
such
 as dengue and leptospirosis as there is a saying ‘prevention is better than cure’. Imagine if the
place
 is filthy, the number of vectors will increase, spreading the disease throughout the people who resides there.
On the other hand
, the
government
also
 plays a crucial part in keeping the cleanliness of the
place
. Law enforcement should be placed for those violated the hygienic of the surrounding by throwing the trash in the restricted
place
.
Therefore
, whoever disregards the rules will be penalized or put into jail.
For example
, the landowner will be fined RM2000 and doing social service if their
place
 is unsanitary and contains Aedes mosquito larvae.
This
 action should be done as some of the residents are too stubborn and tend to neglect their
responsibility
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responsibilities
. In conclusion, in my view, the residents should be the one held huge role in ensuring the hygienic of the environment, but the
government
 should assist the landowner as well in keeping the
neighborhood
a surrounding or nearby region
neighbourhood
 a cleaner
place
.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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