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Some people believe that it is essential to include Physical Education classes in the curriculum for all school-age children. Others think that children's time is better spent on more academic subjects. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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Since parents wish the best
education
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 for their children, it has been debated whether physical activities should be part of the school educational program. Some people support gym classes considering the benefits of physical activities on
body
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the body
 and mind, whereas others believe that the time for academic subjects should not be
sacrified
endure the loss of
sacrificed
. In
this
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 essay the role of physical
education
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 in the course of study will be discussed. There are many arguments in favour of the inclusion of physical
education
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 in the school
curricola
an integrated course of academic studies
curricula
curriculum
.
Firstly
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, gym classes may have health
benefits expecially
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benefits, especially
benefits especially
 in western countries where the diffusion of video-games and smart phone have
encoraged
inspired with confidence
encouraged
 sedentary lifestyle and obesity.
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, body exercise has been shown in studies to improve academic performance.
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, in the
contex
discourse that surrounds a language unit and helps to determine its interpretation
context
 of big cities where there are fewer and fewer places for children to play safely outside,
shools
an educational institution
schools
sales
 offer guarded space to practice physical activities. When it comes to arguments against physical
education
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, many people believe that parents should make sure that children get enough exercise, not schools.
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, having more hours of academic subject would increase the possibility to enter into a good university and
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 to get a high-paying job in the future.
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, modern societies need more engineers, scientists and teachers of core subjects than athletes. In summary, both sides seem to have sound arguments.
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, I am of the opinion that physical
education
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 is an essential part of school educational program as it is proven to improve both health and intellectual activities.
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