Ques: Some people think that getting a degree from university is the best way to guarantee a good job, others believe that it would be better to go straight into work and get experience.

It is undeniable fact that
recruitement
the act of getting recruits; enlisting people for the army (or for a job or a cause etc.)
recruitment
criteria in the companies
is changing
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are changing
.
Although
, some
people
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People
believe that university
degree
holders land in reputed industries, others believe that
learning
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Learning
the right skills with work experience matters more. Before putting forward any opinion,
it
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It
is important to investigate both the aspects of
this
argument. On the one hand, it is commonly thought that procuring
theoritical
concerned primarily with theories or hypotheses rather than practical considerations
theoretical
knowledge is essential before
getting
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Getting
into practical implementation.
This
is because, only if a pupil has the factual insight of
the
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The
subject
then
only he is fit for the work. For illustration, in Japan, 65% doctors who own MD
degree
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Degree
performed well in the hospitals than MBBS
degree
holder It is evident that higher post-graduates
doctors
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Doctors
tend to excel better in their career as compared to medical graduates.
In other words
, medical
practicioners
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Practitioners
Practicioners
who are aware about the symptoms and repercussions of a disease will be able to diagnose
and
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And
cure it effectively.
On the other hand
, it is often thought that 'Experience is the best teacher' and students tend to
learn
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Learn
swiftly when they are taught to comprehend while working.
This
is because, when interns are
positioned
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Positioned
in an environment directly where they acquire the
skillset
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skill set
required for the employment,
they
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They
ought to grasp it more constructively.
For example
, in India, 55% agile scrum masters who learned
directly
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Directly
at the work platform earned more proficiency than those who completed their masters in
subject
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the subject
a subject
. To conclude, while many people say that university graduates secure their job with the
degree
, others
believe
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Believe
that experience enhances the expertise in the subject and
hence
, helpful to seize a job. After discussing both the views, I personally believe that acquiring an academic
degree
is the
key
United States lawyer and poet who wrote a poem after witnessing the British attack on Baltimore during the War of 1812; the poem was later set to music and entitled 'The Star-Spangled Banner' (1779-1843)
Key
to bag a good job.Since, I have myself completed MCA from reputed university and now I'm working as
as Software Engineer
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As a Software Engineer
As Software Engineer
in
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at
Microsoft.

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