There are many different types of music in the world today. Why do we need music? Is the traditional music of a country more important than the international music that is heard everywhere nowadays?

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It is true that musics
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really an essential part in our life and play a role in motivating or just simply make our
moods
the opening through which food is taken in and vocalizations emerge
mouths
be comfortable. Personally, I believe that traditional
music
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of a country more important than other international
music
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which is heard everywhere nowadays. Human beings
have been developing
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have developed
music
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and enjoyed for
very long time
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a very long time
ago. Since we were born, we have been taught how to sing a song and enjoyed many lovely
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that would be
unforgettable moment
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an unforgettable moment
unforgettable momentous
. As children, they
firstly
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know how to sing before studying how to write and read. It makes it easier for the children to memorize the
lyrcis
the text of a popular song or musical-comedy number
lyrics
of song than read a long story. And so that, it could help them to easily remember any vocabulary of the new language. Nowadays, people tend to listen more international
music
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which is entertaining and popular.
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, in my opinion, I think that traditional
music
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should be valued over international
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that has become very popular, and kept developing in the future. A rich variety of pop
musics
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music
are
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is
catchy and fun, they're
vital part
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a vital part
vital parts
the vital part
in commercialize
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purpose, such
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as promoting a product or event, or just simply want to make the singers become more popular in the Internet. Vice versa, traditional
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is written without any commercial purpose. It just
wants people be
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wants people to be
more happy
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happier
, and remember the childhood with family. In conclusion,
music
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has been playing an important role and constitute a vital part of emotional values to our life. International pop
music
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could be easily obsoleted and replace the new one. But with traditional
music
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that would never
dissapear
get lost, as without warning or explanation
disappear
disappears
disappeared
in our memories.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • emotional release
  • cultural significance
  • globalization
  • cultural exchange
  • technology
  • preservation
  • cultural heritage
  • social cohesion
  • expression
  • consumption
  • production
  • traditional music
  • international music
  • diversity
  • identity
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