There are many different types of music in the world today. Why do we need music? Is the traditional music of a country more important than the international music that is heard everywhere nowadays?

It is true that musics
is
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are
really an essential part in our life and play a role in motivating or just simply make our
moods
the opening through which food is taken in and vocalizations emerge
mouths
be comfortable. Personally, I believe that traditional
music
of a country more important than other international
music
which is heard everywhere nowadays. Human beings
have been developing
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have developed
music
and enjoyed for
very long time
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a very long time
ago. Since we were born, we have been taught how to sing a song and enjoyed many lovely
music
that would be
unforgettable moment
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an unforgettable moment
unforgettable momentous
. As children, they
firstly
know how to sing before studying how to write and read. It makes it easier for the children to memorize the
lyrcis
the text of a popular song or musical-comedy number
lyrics
of song than read a long story. And so that, it could help them to easily remember any vocabulary of the new language. Nowadays, people tend to listen more international
music
which is entertaining and popular.
Nonetheless
, in my opinion, I think that traditional
music
should be valued over international
music
that has become very popular, and kept developing in the future. A rich variety of pop
musics
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music
are
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is
catchy and fun, they're
vital part
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a vital part
vital parts
the vital part
in commercialize
purpose
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purpose, such
such
as promoting a product or event, or just simply want to make the singers become more popular in the Internet. Vice versa, traditional
music
is written without any commercial purpose. It just
wants people be
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wants people to be
more happy
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happier
, and remember the childhood with family. In conclusion,
music
has been playing an important role and constitute a vital part of emotional values to our life. International pop
music
could be easily obsoleted and replace the new one. But with traditional
music
that would never
dissapear
get lost, as without warning or explanation
disappear
disappears
disappeared
in our memories.

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