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Some people feel that petrol cars should be banned. Others feel that we should be allowed to drive petrol cars. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

#people #petrol #cars #drive
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Nowadays people tend to have different opinions regarding a use of petrol car. While some insist on continuation of them, I personally agree and argue with those who support
ban
Suggestion
a ban
the ban
bans
 on these cars as it is a non-renewable energy resource and we should restrict its usage. Those who feel
patrol
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 cars should be allowed are concerned about the stress on the other forms of transportation. Since these cars are banned, all of the commuters will have to rely on the other available transport options.
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, people who go to the work will have to take a bus or a train to commute to their destination. As a consequence, possibility of
over crowding
cause to crowd together too much
overcrowding
 in these public transport systems is very high and can cause inconvenience to the passengers. One significant reason why I feel
patrol
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 cars should be banned is that the
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 is
non-renewable energy resource
Suggestion
a non-renewable energy resource
 and cause of the air pollution. Which means once we have used all the available fuel in the future, it is impossible to reproduce
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.
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 it is necessary to restrict its usage by narrowing down the availability to the consumers. To describe, suppose all
patrol
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 cars are banned and people are using the alternate options, it can aid a reduction in the air pollution. As a whole
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 act might help to protect the environment. In conclusion, while those who support petrol cars are worried about over-crowding in the public transport
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 of
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 car ban, I stand firm with
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 initiative to close out these cars because it can help in
conservation
Suggestion
the conservation
 of the precious resource as well as the environment.
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    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • emissions
  • greenhouse gases
  • global warming
  • air pollution
  • respiratory problems
  • climate change
  • sustainable
  • renewable energy sources
  • dependency
  • fossil fuels
  • innovation
  • sustainability practices
  • infrastructure
  • electric vehicles (EVs)
  • charging stations
  • economic implications
  • automobile industry
  • job losses
  • economic instability
  • investment
  • consumers
  • manufacturers
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