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Some people think that exercise is the key to health while others feels that having a balanced diet is more important. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Introduction
Being healthy has become one of the crucial factors in our daily lives. Are we following a healthy lifestyle? Some argue that performing physical activities
is
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are
 a root to remain healthy, while
other
plural of other; the people or things not already mentioned
others
 consider appropriate eating of paramount importance. In my opinion, a nutritional
diet
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serve
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serves
 as a supporting pillar for carrying out physical activities, and
hence
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, ought to have
utmost importance
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the utmost importance
.
Body paragraph 1
Physical
exercise
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 has always been considered as part of healthy well-being. In general, it is always advisable to spend at least 30 minutes, on-daily basis, for exercising.
For instance
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, those who bring
this
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 in their daily routine, irrespective of their schedule, are found to be more; physically fit and active.
Furthermore
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, they have shown reduced signs of ageing, and
also
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, they are found to have
stronger immune system
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a stronger immune system
stronger immune systems
 to fight against diseases, which
consequently
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, has improved their overall fitness level. To sum up, remain physically active can do wonders to
ones
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one's
 health and help them to look younger.
Body paragraph 2
On the other hand
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, in order to remain physically active, one has to have a balanced
diet
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; for
constant source
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a constant source
 of
energy
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 and power.
In other words
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, absence of proper food, will neither activate
body
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 cell nor generate
energy
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 in
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body
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the body
.
For example
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, according to dietitians, our
body
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 follows 70:30 rule; 70% of
diet
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 and 30% of
exercise
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, and
this
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 70% of nutritional food will help in releasing
energy
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 to
body
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 cells for doing
exercise
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.
In addition
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, unhealthy food
can not
can not
cannot
 be digested, irrespective of performing several hours of
exercise
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. To summarise, balanced
diet
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 acts as a fuel to generate
energy
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 in our
body
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 and support physical activities.
Conclusion
In conclusion, physical
exercise
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 and balanced
diet
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, goes hand-in-hand;
however
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, the
later
referring to the second of two things or persons mentioned (or the last one or ones of several)
latter
 supports the former for a healthy lifestyle.
Therefore
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, in my opinion, one must give more importance to
diet
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 in maintaining healthy life.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Cardiovascular health
  • Metabolism
  • Chronic diseases
  • Immune system
  • Mental well-being
  • Nutrients
  • Malnutrition
  • Obesity
  • Type 2 diabetes
  • Circulation
  • Nutrient distribution
  • Preventive health
  • Energy levels
  • Balanced diet
  • Essential nutrients
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