Some parents believe that their children should do educational studies in their free time. others say that in this way the children are under pressure. Discuss both the views and give your opinion.

Getting ample amount of free
time
to younger adolescents
have become
Suggestion
has become
had become
hard now a day. Despite, a significant amount of parents think that, the free
time
has to be spent for educational
purpose while
Accept comma addition
purpose, while
others feel that, they have to spend on recreational activities. I believe that,
time
is very precious. It has to be wisely managed for both education and part-
time
activities.
Firstly
, in
this
fast moving world, technology is flourishing every
leaps
Suggestion
leap
and bounds. The
enoromous
extraordinarily large in size or extent or amount or power or degree
enormous
growth of the digital world has impacted every field, out of which younger lad's are the most to face these consequences.
However
, in the free
time
they are forced to prepare for competitive tests by their parents.
Additionally
, children are experiencing only studies in the whole year, which will have a negative impact on their performance.
For instance
, one of my friend's son has committed
sucide
the act of killing yourself
suicide
, as he was unable to
bare
have
bear
the pressure from college as well as parents.
On the other hand
, If enough
time
is given to younger people for sports and other physical activities, there would be a great improvement in their efficiency.
Secondly
, physical fitness is very important to balance mental stress, as they face
diffuculty
an effort that is inconvenient
difficulty
difficult
difficulties
to manage stress at
this
age.
In addition
to
this
, a recent study has shown that, the children who spends 2 hours daily on sports have succeeded better than others.
For example
, all the IIT top rankers in
india
a republic in the Asian subcontinent in southern Asia; second most populous country in the world; achieved independence from the United Kingdom in 1947
India
have some hobbies
such
as sports. To
conlcude
decide by reasoning; draw or come to a conclusion
conclude
, it is very tough to get free
time
now a day while
majority
Suggestion
the majority
of parents force their children to utilize the
time
for education, each individual has to use it very cleverly. I believe that it has to be used for both studies and exercise.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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