Rich countries give money to poorer countries but it does not solve the problem of poverty.Therefore developed countries should give other types of help to poor countries rather than financial aid To what extent do you agree or disagree

   The eradication of poverty in
under developed
relating to societies in which capital needed to industrialize is in short supply
underdeveloped
countries remains a very controversial issue. It is common for affluent nations
to offer
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offer
monetary
aid
to resource-poor countries. It is thought that well advanced countries should channel their  aids to other areas
besides
financial help
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the financial help
as the latter has not helped to solve the problem of poverty. I totally agree with
this
notion. In my opinion, countries should give more of
such
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Such
as provision of infrastructure and services rather than money.     
First
and foremost, poor countries are
most often
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more often
than not led by corrupt and greedy leaders. Embezzlement of funds and foreign
aid
is the order of the day. It is in the best interest of
this countries
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this country
these countries
that services be traded
instead
of money.
For instance
, in Nigeria
,
Accept space
,
it is public knowledge that most of the financial help from rich nations
are used
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is used
to fuel the extravagant lifestyles of our politicians, rather than give money for subsequent projects like building infrastructure
,
Accept space
,
these countries should
instead
provide the materials and manpower to build structures themselves for the benefits of the citizens.     
Furthermore
, the exchange rate of the different countries can cause significant problems. The monies when converted to the currency of the receiving country might not be sufficient to carry out the project it was set aside for.
In addition
, bad economic policies in poor countries can result in gross mismanagement of funds which defeats the purpose of the
aid
in the
first
instance.     In conclusion
,
Accept space
,
although
financial
aid
can help destitute countries. I totally agree that other forms of age should be used to help
this countries
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this country
these countries
because of the problems of corruption and bad government policies.

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