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Some companies sponsor sports as a way to advertise themselves. Some people think it is good, while other thinks is has disadvantages to this. Discuss both views and give your opinion?

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Sport is an important part of healthy
life
 and nowadays it is connected to marketing strategies, most of the companies use as a tool in order to endorse their products. The majority of the population thinks that it is a great thing to increase particular products sells, boost stock values and overall revenue in terms of the company’s prospect.
However
, others believe that it has a tremendous drawback in relation
with
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to
 consumers. In my opinion, definitely, it will impose negative aspects that might affect general people. A sport plays a vital role in everyone’s
life
; recent marketing trends are changing radically in the sports industry because it is used as a marketing medium to sell products or services. Most of
people
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the people
 love sports, they stimulated to buy products/services and the companies use
this
 thing as a tool to promote their products by backing sports events.
For example
,
IPL
 Cricket matches are one of the most famous game events in India, which is organized every year in
month
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the month
 of spring. Around 90% of Indian companies sponsor
IPL
 matches and displays their products/services in order to boost their
sell
your consciousness of your own identity
self
 which ultimately increase their revenues and financial prospects.
On the other hand
, sponsoring sports events will encourage people to purchase things which they rarely use in daily
life
. In
this
 case, people who are interested in sports will spend a huge amount of money on things related to sports they love and those we can count as un-necessary expenditure.
For instance
, according to a survey reported by the BBC news regarding general population spending in one month of
IPL
 matches in 2018. The results were pretty shocking as people spend around 40% extra money as compared to other
months
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months'
 expenses on things, which are connected with the Cricket. They are buying those all just because it is endorsed by their favourite team or a player and all
IPL
teams including
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teams, including
 players are sponsored by local or international firms. In conclusion, sponsoring sports will definitely
hike sports
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hike, sports
 as well as company stocks.
Nevertheless
, in my opinion, it has too much downside in terms of the general public. It is simply a mind-diversion of
people which
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people, which
 is encouraging them to buy services/products they really don’t need in daily
life
 scenarios.
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