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Some people think it would be a good idea for schools to teach every young person how to be a good parent. Do you agree or disagree with this opinion? Describe the skills a person needs to be a good parent.

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Being a good
parent
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 is a much needed quality which every individual must
posses
have as an attribute, knowledge, or skill
possess
.
This
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 skill should be developed in a
person
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 in his childhood and, schools could contribute to enhance
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 ability. In
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 essay, I share my thoughts about engaging schools to teach kids about parenting. In my opinion, children spend a large time of their day in school. "How to
be come
enter or assume a certain state or condition
become
 a good
parent
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?"
is
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Is
 something that schools can emphasise in their
curiculam
an integrated course of academic studies
curriculum
curriculums
curricula
 just like any other subject like history or science. In a class, students could get a variety of opinions from
thier
of them or themselves
their
 peers and teachers on how a
parent
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 would react to a particular situation.
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 helps the
child
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 get exposure to a different
behaviorial
of or relating to behavior
behavioural
 aspects and,
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 will assist to make a right
decission
the act of making up your mind about something
decision
decisions
 for his younger
one
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 in
future
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the future
. Parenting
also
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 requires sacrifices done to make a wish come true. Educational
insititutions
an organization founded and united for a specific purpose
institutions
 have many pupils and, with each sharing their experiences with
one
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 another facilitates an understanding of how a mother or father sacrifice for their
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child
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children
. A good
parent
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, in my
view a
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view, a
person
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 who provides all best possible
to
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for
thier
of them or themselves
their
child
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. Some of the key skills a good
parent
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 must have is the patience, ability to 'let go', able to explain
difference
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the difference
 between right and wrong. Every
person
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 needs to be extremely calm with their young
one
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, they should avoid being angry
on
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at
with
 them frequently and patiently explain the effects of any action. There will be times
where in the baby
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where the baby
 will just understand the idea or concept
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 being explained and repeat the same actions over and over again. A "good
parent
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" in a composed manner should keep trying to make the kid understand the consequences of the actions. Apart having patience,
one
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 must
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 have quality to give up their desires. An individual must put the wishes of their children as
top priority
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a top priority
the top priority
 and if the situation permits they could
fulfill
put in effect
fulfil
 their own wish. As example, on a given weekend your
child
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 could make a request to watch a football game, while you may have made plans to play golf; giving up to the request of your
child
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 would be right
decission
the act of making up your mind about something
decision
.
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 brings a smile on his or her face and makes you a role model for them. My conclusion is, parenting is needs is a mix of soft skills which are
required to for every
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required for every
 man or woman. Institutes like school, colleges, etc.
where
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Where
 a lot of time is spent in the early years of life and, if
pareting
a father or mother; one who begets or one who gives birth to or nurtures and raises a child; a relative who plays the role of guardian
parenting
operating
 skills are embedded early days it helps an individual to be a good
person
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.
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