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The charts below give information on the ages of the populations of Yemen and Italy in 2000 and projections for 2050. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below give information on the ages of the populations of Yemen and Italy in 2000 and projections for 2050. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The graph illustrates the
consumption
 of six
kind
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kinds
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 of
energy
 in
American
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America
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 from 1980 to estimated 2030 based on a 2008 report.
It is clear that
 during the 50-year period, petrol and oil
remains
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remain
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 the most significant resource of
energy
. It is predicted that even though renewable
resource
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resources
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 can expect a slight increase, traditional forms of fuel will continue to
provided
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provide
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 the majority of
energy
. In 1980, residents in the USA consumed 35
quadrillion
units
 of
energy
 that are provided by petrol and oil. Coal and natural gas contributed approximately 16
quadrillion
units
 and 20
quadrillion
units
 of
energy
 respectively. With regard to several eco-friendly
resources
, the
consumption
 of nuclear , solar or wind and hydropower are much smaller, only 4
quadrillion
units
 for each
resources
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resource
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.
Overall
, the
consumption
 of each
resources
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resource
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have
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 seen
an
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a
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 growing trend, even though some fluctuation can be observed. It is predicted that in 2030, petrol and oil
is
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are
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 supposed to provide 50
quadrillion
units
 of
energy
, 15
units
 more than 50 years ago.
Similarly
, the
consumption
 of coal and natural gas will rise to around 30
units
 and 25
units
, slightly more compared with the figure
of
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for
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 1980.
However
, the
consumption
 of
other
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the other
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 three renewable
resources
remain
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remains
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 low, hydropower is expected to contribute less than 5
units
 in 2030.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words consumption, energy, quadrillion, units, resources with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "provided" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remains" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slight" was used 2 times.
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