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The charts below give information on the ages of the populations of Yemen and Italy in 2000 and projections for 2050. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below give information on the ages of the populations of Yemen and Italy in 2000 and projections for 2050. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The graph illustrates the
consumption
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 of six
kind
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kinds
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 of
energy
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 in
American
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America
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 from 1980 to estimated 2030 based on a 2008 report.
It is clear that
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 during the 50-year period, petrol and oil
remains
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remain
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 the most significant resource of
energy
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. It is predicted that even though renewable
resource
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resources
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 can expect a slight increase, traditional forms of fuel will continue to
provided
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 the majority of
energy
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. In 1980, residents in the USA consumed 35
quadrillion
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units
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 of
energy
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 that are provided by petrol and oil. Coal and natural gas contributed approximately 16
quadrillion
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units
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 and 20
quadrillion
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units
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 of
energy
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 respectively. With regard to several eco-friendly
resources
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, the
consumption
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 of nuclear , solar or wind and hydropower are much smaller, only 4
quadrillion
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units
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 for each
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resources
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resource
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.
Overall
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, the
consumption
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 of each
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resources
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resource
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have
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has
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 seen
an
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a
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 growing trend, even though some fluctuation can be observed. It is predicted that in 2030, petrol and oil
is
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are
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 supposed to provide 50
quadrillion
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units
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 of
energy
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, 15
units
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 more than 50 years ago.
Similarly
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, the
consumption
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 of coal and natural gas will rise to around 30
units
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 and 25
units
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, slightly more compared with the figure
of
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for
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 1980.
However
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, the
consumption
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 of
other
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the other
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 three renewable
resources
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remain
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remains
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 low, hydropower is expected to contribute less than 5
units
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 in 2030.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words consumption, energy, quadrillion, units, resources with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "provided" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remains" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slight" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • population distribution
  • age group
  • population pyramid
  • projections
  • young population
  • aging population
  • demographic shift
  • increase in elderly population
  • proportion
  • percentage
  • population dynamics
  • top-heavy
  • balanced age distribution
  • healthcare needs
  • pension provision
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