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Some people claim that museums and art galleries will not be needed because people can see historical objects and works of art by computer. Do you agree or disagree with this opinion? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Museums and
art
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 galleries are popular in every corner of the world because they play an important role in preserving the history and beauty of cultures and people. Nowadays, with the development of the Internet and
information
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 technology, it is argued by some that historical objects and works can be seen on
computer
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computers
a computer
the computer
, so museums and
art
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gallaries
spectators at a golf or tennis match
galleries
 are no longer needed. I do not agree with that opinion for many reasons. Historical experience can be clearly described in
books
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the books
 and the
information
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 can be easily distributed on the
Internet but
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Internet, but
 real objects and work have stronger effects on observers'
emotion
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emotional
. When we see an old mug used by a soldier who
sacrified
endure the loss of
sacrificed
 his life in a battle to protect our
country
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, we have the connection with the past and that object touches our heart. It opens a picture in our mind about the life of our hero. That feeling lasts longer
in
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with
 us than any other words that may be used to describe the situation. Museums and
art
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gallaries
spectators at a golf or tennis match
galleries
 are of essential importance as they are the image of each region and
country
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. The purpose of visiting a foreign
country
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 is to see it in real
life even
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life, even
 though we can always find
information
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 and photos of the people and the land through
internet
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the internet
.
As a result
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, visiting museums and
art
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 places
is
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are
 a must-come places for visitors to understand the history and the people. The existence of culture houses and
art
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 places encourage young people to learn about their ancestors and their
country
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's culture. It is very difficult to ask the young to go to the internet and look for
information
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 about the past as they are more interested in what is happening around them and in the world. The visual
information
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 of history in the city or even in the
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country side
rural regions
countryside
 will go directly to their mind to remind them of their origins. Because of those reasons mentioned above, I believe that museums and
art
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gallaries
spectators at a golf or tennis match
galleries
 are very important spiritually and educationally and they need a lot of care and investment.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • virtual
  • digital
  • online
  • accessibility
  • inclusivity
  • cultural heritage
  • physical experience
  • immersion
  • local tourism
  • economy
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