Success if often measured by wealth and material belongings. Do you think wealth is the best measure of success? What makes a person successful?

A
person
is considered successful if he has a good bank balance and owns expensive items of daily use. In my opinion, wealth and costly items do not determine the
success
of a
person
. Other factors play a pivotal role in making an individual successful. To start with,
money
is not the best marker of
success
. A rich
person
may be having a decent bank balance, but if he is socially isolated, that may render him psychologically deprived.
For instance
, a famous personality, who owns one of the biggest marketplaces online, recently split up with his wife.
Although
, he still owns a good amount of
money
and multiple valuables, he did not lead a successful married life. There are numerous other factors, which play a key role in determining whether a
person
is successful or not. One of the most significant
factor
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factors
is inter family relationships. A
person
having strong relationships with his family members, even having
meagre amount
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the meagre amount
of
money
, feels much more satisfied. To illustrate, a survey conducted by an NGO called Society For Skill Training And Development (SSTD), concluded in their results that
the poor
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the poorest
class in Pakistan leads
more joyful life
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a more joyful life
than the elite class families. When asked
from
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for
the poor
person
, they attributed their happiness and
success
to
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with
their families. To sum up, it is quite evident that
money
cannot be the best measure of
success
.
Other
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Another
important factor is family, and relationship with family members, because it is only the family
that is
there for a
person
to celebrate
success
.
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