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Things which were previously done manually are now being performed mechanically. The drawbacks of
this
mechanical
life style
a manner of living that reflects the person's values and attitudes
lifestyle
are eclipsed by its numerous advantages.
This
essay will discuss how the positives like time saving and efficiency of machines overshadowed the negative of human addiction to mechanical
work
.
To begin
, the most common of modern machinery is developing human dependence upon them. Now a days machines of all sorts
have been invented
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has been invented
to perform all household chores, due to which people prefer to get all their jobs done by machines without their effort and hard
work
.
This
consequently effect
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consequently affects
consequently affect
their
physically fitness they
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physical fitness, they
physical fitness they
eventually start getting
wait
wetness caused by water
wet
and become obese.
For example
,
study
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a study
the study
studies
conducted in America in 2007 proved that 75 % of modern population who accomplish their tasks through machines are predisposed to hypertension and coronary artery diseases. Taking
in
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into
account the advantages,
firstly
, performing chores via machines help us to save time
.
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.
In
this
world of increasing professionalism machines act as
blessing
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a blessing
in disguise specially for women as they can complete their tasks quickly.
Therefore they
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Therefore, they
manage to have some ample time in which they can relax and take care of their family.
For instance
, a research paper launched in China about free working hours
,
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,
proposed people using
differen
unlike in nature or quality or form or degree
different
appliances to perform tasks have 30%
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more
relaxing hours than others.
Secondly
, tasks done by machines are more efficient, while manually performed tasks contain errors because humans are prone to mistakes while computerized
work
is more accurate due to an installed software in it. It is exemplified by the weight machine,
measurment
the act or process of assigning numbers to phenomena according to a rule
measurements
measurement
taken by
this
is far more accurate than made by hand balance. I conclude, advantages like quickness and accuracy over weigh the negative of human mechanical dependency.
Thus
, if
some one
a human being
someone
limits the use of
machins
any mechanical or electrical device that transmits or modifies energy to perform or assist in the performance of human tasks
machines
and try to do
work
on his
own than
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own, then
own then
this
will surely prevent him from different diseases.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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