Many things that used to be done in the home by hands are now being done by machines. Does this develomeng bring more advantages or disadvantages.

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Things which were previously done manually are now being performed mechanically. The drawbacks of

this

mechanical

life style

a manner of living that reflects the person's values and attitudes

lifestyle

are eclipsed by its numerous advantages.

This

essay will discuss how the positives like time saving and efficiency of machines overshadowed the negative of human addiction to mechanical

work

To begin

, the most common of modern machinery is developing human dependence upon them. Now a days machines of all sorts

have been invented

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has been invented

to perform all household chores, due to which people prefer to get all their jobs done by machines without their effort and hard

work

This

consequently effect

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consequently affects

consequently affect

their

physically fitness they

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physical fitness, they

physical fitness they

eventually start getting

wait

wetness caused by water

wet

and become obese.

For example

study

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a study

the study

studies

conducted in America in 2007 proved that 75 % of modern population who accomplish their tasks through machines are predisposed to hypertension and coronary artery diseases. Taking

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into

account the advantages,

firstly

, performing chores via machines help us to save time

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this

world of increasing professionalism machines act as

blessing

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a blessing

in disguise specially for women as they can complete their tasks quickly.

Therefore they

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Therefore, they

manage to have some ample time in which they can relax and take care of their family.

For instance

, a research paper launched in China about free working hours

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proposed people using

differen

unlike in nature or quality or form or degree

different

appliances to perform tasks have 30%

mord

used to form the comparative of some adjectives and adverbs

relaxing hours than others.

Secondly

, tasks done by machines are more efficient, while manually performed tasks contain errors because humans are prone to mistakes while computerized

work

is more accurate due to an installed software in it. It is exemplified by the weight machine,

measurment

the act or process of assigning numbers to phenomena according to a rule

measurements

measurement

taken by

this

is far more accurate than made by hand balance. I conclude, advantages like quickness and accuracy over weigh the negative of human mechanical dependency.

Thus

, if

some one

a human being

someone

limits the use of

machins

any mechanical or electrical device that transmits or modifies energy to perform or assist in the performance of human tasks

machines

and try to do

work

on his

own than

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own, then

own then

this

will surely prevent him from different diseases.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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9Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
1Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
17Grammar mistakes
 

4 paragraphs

314 words

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 5.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

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Include an introduction and conclusion

Essentional vocabulary list for IELTS Writing 7+

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