Some people think that parents should teach their children how to be good members of society. Others, however, believe that school is the best place to learn this. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

Some argue that children should be taught to be good members of the society
by
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of
their parents, while others think that learning in school is the best way.
This
essay agrees with both the views.
Firstly
, the essay will discuss how parents contribute to a child’s development by creating a positive
environment
at home, and
secondly
how children learn to respect one another in schools. On the one hand, people believe that parents should teach their children to be good citizens by creating a positive
environment
at home. Children interact with their parents the most while growing up, and tend to replicate their mannerisms and habits. If the
environment
is bad, it might have a detrimental effect on their personality.
For example
, a recent study by the American Social Magazine revealed that children who experienced domestic violence in their adolescence replicate the same mannerisms as an adult. I believe that
this
view is accurate because parents are responsible for creating a healthy learning
environment
for their children during the early years of their lives.
On the other hand
, many people believe it is more beneficial for children to learn moral values in schools because they interact with many students and learn to respect one another. By communicating with other students, children understand the dynamics of a
functional
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functioning
society and learn to be more tolerant towards other cultures and religions.
For example
, a recent survey by the Indian society magazine found that 25% of adults who did not attend schools are involved in some form of communal violence. I agree with
this
view because values
such
as empathy,
team work
cooperative work done by a team (especially when it is effective)
teamwork
and respect for other cultures can be learnt much better in school than at home. In conclusion, it is important to educate children, both in schools and at their homes, because children learn many habits by replicating their parents and schools teach them the be more respectful and tolerant.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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