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you have been living in a rental apartment for the past year. Recently a new neighbour moved in and has been making a lot of noise, which disturbs you. Write a letter to the landlord. In your letter: *Explain the situation *Describe why it bothers you *Suggest a solution

#apartment #year #neighbour #noise #landlord #*explain #situation #*describe #*suggest
Dear Sir, I am writing
this
 letter to inform you that
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 have been living in your
apartment
 building for the past few years. My name is Alex and
apartment
 no.115. As you know new tenants just moved into
apartment
 number 116 and have been making a lot of noise and playing music at a high volume.
Firstly
, I am a college student and my exams are coming on the next month and it is so hard for me to put my concentrate on my studies because of
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 noise coming from new neighbours. I have tried 3 times to contact them and leave a note about
this
 issue on their door but I didn't get any response from them. I would like to request you please solve
this
 issue or I can move my
apartment
 to the 2nd floor. I am paying all the security fees and rent on time. Kindly, please take
this
 matter into consideration and help me to come to a resolution. I hope to hear from you soon. Kind regards, Alex
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Task Achievement
To improve task response, ensure you address all aspects of the task fully. In your letter, while you explained the situation and suggested a solution, elaborating more on why it specifically bothers you beyond just your studies could provide a more complete response.
Coherence and Cohesion
For coherence and cohesion, try to use a wider range of linking devices to better connect your ideas. While your letter flows relatively well, incorporating phrases such as 'Furthermore' or 'Moreover' could enhance the connection between your points.
Coherence and Cohesion
When beginning and ending your letter, ensure you use formal language suitable for writing to a landlord. Your letter starts and ends appropriately but might benefit from a more formal closing like 'Yours sincerely' instead of 'Kind regards,' especially if you haven't met the landlord in person.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • tenant
  • landlord
  • disrupt
  • mutual respect
  • soundproofing
  • noise pollution
  • accommodate
  • mediation
  • amicable resolution
  • constructive dialogue
  • disturbance
  • consideration
  • prompt resolution
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