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The government is spending a lot of money to discover life in other planets some people think that government is wasting money and should spend more money Addressing problems of public To what extent you agree or disagree?

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It is commonly believed that pouring a lot of the governmental resources to unravel universe is an absolute waste of them,
however
, they better be utilized for the public welfare. I agree that the bulk of the governmental finances should be directed to meet the basic needs of society, but I
also
 consider
space
 exploration as a significant scientific pursuit.
To begin
,
firstly
,
government
Suggestion
the government
 should spend generously to contribute
good
Suggestion
well
better
 to the public rather than discovering the unknown. The
space
 exploration is
highly expansive project
Suggestion
a highly expansive project
the highly expansive project
 that needs huge investment
hence
, developing countries like us better direct their finances to improve living standards. As we are lacking in basics like clothing, food, education and employment it is the need of government to funnel tax payers money to more down- to- earth projects. Reforms should be introduced which are crucial to
welfare
Suggestion
the welfare
 of society
such
 as free education and economical
health
 care.
For example
, Imran khan introduced
health
 program in 2011 in which poor people were provided with
health
 cards to seek free
health
 care.
On the other hand
, acquiring the knowledge of
universe
Suggestion
the universe
hold
Suggestion
holds
 a significant importance in fields of sciences. By launching satellites
in to
expresses motion to a point on, or within, something
into
space
 scientists are able to uncover the remarkable Knowledge about weather and survival conditions on other
space
 bodies.
This
 is helpful in one way as we predict
the worse
Suggestion
the bad
 weather disasters before hand and can make preventions and
furthermore
 in case when all the earth resources will deplete and population will exceed the earth capacity we will have a chance to migrate to
an
located at or attached to
on
 another planet with survival
facillities
.
For instance
, NASA launched a satellite
on
Suggestion
of
to
 Mars in 2008 which discovered, the
foot prints
a mark of a foot or shoe on a surface
footprints
 of human survival and along with
presence
Suggestion
the presence
 of gasses essential for human survival
.
Accept space
.
 In conclusion, government on his
first
 hand should try to provide basic facilities to public and
then
 pour money for
space
 venture as its
second
 priority.
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