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During a recent plane journey, you sat next to a businessman who owns a chain of restaurants. You talked to him and he suggested that you should contact him about a possible job in one of his restaurants. Write a letter to this businessman. In your letter remind him when and where you met tell him what kind of job you are interested in say why you think you would be suitable for the job

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Dear Sir, I am writing
this
 email to remind you regarding the availability of a job position in one of your restaurants. My name is Jee, and I travelled with you from London to Pune on the 25th of November 2023 . We met at the checkout point and I was sitting right next to you during our travel. You informed me to reach out to you regarding the job offer at one of your restaurants. I am interested in the cashier position as I have a couple of years of experience working as a cashier in one of the supermarkets in my city.
Moreover
, I handle all kinds of customers and I can speak English quite well.
Hence
, I believe that I can handle a diverse group of customers at the restaurant.
Furthermore
, I consider myself to be reliable, hardworking, and enthusiastic. Herewith, I attached my resume for your reference. I would be grateful if you could consider me for
this
 Job position. I look forward to hearing your response as soon as possible. Yours sincerely, Jee
Submitted by jeeanay on

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coherence cohesion
Ensure each paragraph has a clear central topic. While your paragraphs have relevant information, refinement can enhance clarity and focus.
coherence cohesion
Work on a more appropriate greeting and closing for a letter to someone whose name you presumably know following a personal interaction.
task achievement
When discussing why you would be suitable for the job, provide specific examples of your skills and experiences that relate directly to the job you are applying for.
task achievement
Use a polite and professional tone throughout the letter. Watch out for casual phrases that may not be appropriate in a job application context.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • chain of restaurants
  • potential job opportunity
  • relevant experience
  • managerial role
  • customer service
  • qualifications
  • certifications
  • unique skills
  • eagerness
  • admiration
  • resume
  • references
  • face-to-face meeting
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