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Write a letter to a friend. You have borrowed something from your friend and it got damaged. a) apologize for damaging the product b) explain what happened c) say how are you going to fix the issue

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dear aliz, I hope you are doing well, I'm writing
this
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 letter to you to apologize.
Firstly
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, I’m really sorry about you, the CD player I borrowed from you
last
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 month. which
that
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apply
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falls to the ground from my hand. It has broken now, it’s not working properly.
However
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, I tried to fix it not easy to do that.I know how much value to you. As I remember you said your father gave it to
your
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you your
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 on 15th birthday Backk a gain I'm extremely sorry for that. I would like to express my feelings, and what happened to the CD player, the
last
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 day was rainy. I played with my doggy
while
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 listening to music. All of a sudden he jumped on my shoulder.
Therefore
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, the CD player falls to the ground and is broken. We need to our friendship go continuously, without any detrimental effects. Because of that,
i
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I
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 visited
to
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the shop but not possible to the find same item. There is a new model I took photos of, so I send it with
this
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 letter. If you like it please reply to me soon. I hope you appreciate my situation. see you soon. Smith, Sincerely.
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Task Achievement
Remember to use proper punctuation and capitalization. For example, 'Backk' should be 'Back,' 'falls' should be 'fell,' and 'i' should be 'I.'
Coherence and Cohesion
Ensure each paragraph contains a single clear idea and use transitional words to enhance the flow. For example, separate the explanation of the incident from the apology.
Coherence and Cohesion
The letter should end with 'Sincerely,' followed by your signature and name. It appears at the end of the letter, after the closing remarks.
Task Achievement
The task has been addressed completely, covering apology, explanation of the incident, and the proposed solution.
Task Achievement
A suitable, friendly tone is maintained throughout the letter, which is appropriate for writing to a friend.
Coherence and Cohesion
The letter includes a structure with an opening, main body, and closing, which aids in coherence.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Apology
  • Regretful
  • Incident
  • Circumstances
  • Damaged
  • Compensation
  • Repair
  • Replace
  • Responsibility
  • Understanding
  • Forgiveness
  • Sincerely
  • Resolve
  • Personal belongings
  • Accidental
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