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The government is spending a lot of money to discover life in other planets some people think that government is wasting money and should spend more money Addressing problems of public To what extent do you agree and disagree.

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It is commonly believed that pouring a lot of the governmental resources to unravel universe is an absolute waste of them,
however
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 they better be utilized for public welfare. I agree that
bulk
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the bulk
 of the governmental finances should be directed to meet basic needs of society, but I
also
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 consider
space
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 exploration as a significant scientific pursuit.
To begin
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,
government
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 should spend generously to contribute to
public good
Suggestion
the public good
 rather than discovering the unknown. The
space
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 exploration is
highly expansive project
Suggestion
a highly expansive project
the highly expansive project
 that needs huge investment
hence
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, developing countries like us better direct their finances to improve living standards, as we are lacking in basics like clothing, food, education and employment
.
Accept space
.
In the present
challeges
take exception to
challenges
,
Accept space
,
it is the need of the
government
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 to funnel tax payers money to more down- to- earth projects. Reforms should be introduced which are crucial to
welfare
Suggestion
the welfare
 of society
such
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 as free education and economical
health
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 care.
For example
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, Imran khan introduced
health
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 program in 2011 in Pakistan in which poor people were provided with
health
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 cards to seek free
health
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 care. And
government
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 was supposed to pay on their behalf.
On the other hand
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, acquiring the knowledge of
universe
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the universe
hold
Suggestion
holds
 a significant importance in fields of sciences.
Firstly
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, by launching satellites
in to
expresses motion to a point on, or within, something
into
space
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 scientists are able to uncover the remarkable Knowledge about weather and
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secondly they
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secondly, they
 can predict survival conditions on other
space
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 bodies.
This
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 is helpful in one way as we predict the bad weather disasters before hand and can make preventions and
furthermore
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,
incase
Suggestion
in case
 when all the earth resources will deplete and population will exceed the earth capacity we will have a chance to migrate
to an another
Suggestion
on to another
to on another
 planet with survival
facillities
Suggestion
.
For instance
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, NASA launched a satellite
on
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of
to
 Mars in 2008 to collect information, on return it provided us the facts that there were signs of life and
presence
Suggestion
the presence
 of human survival gasses.
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Hence through
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Hence, through
space
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exploration we
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exploration, we
 are able to know much about the universe. To conclude,
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government
Suggestion
the government
 on his
first
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 hand should try to provide basic facilities to
public
Suggestion
the public
becuase
for the reason that; on account of
because
this
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 is much
important
Suggestion
more important
,
then
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 pour money for
space
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 ventures as its
second
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 priority.
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