In recent years, many small shops have closed because customers travel to large shopping centers or malls to do their shopping Is this a positive or a negative development?

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Of late, it is clearly evident that more and more shoppers are inclined to do shopping in fancy shopping malls rather buying it from local shopkeepers.

As a result

this

, local shop owners had to close their business. I would look

this

trend as negative development and I will discuss about my observations in

this

essay. One serious problem that can arise from

this

trend is financial diversity. If shoppers are buying the products from large shopping malls, money would go into the pockets of multi billionaire companies and there could be a possibility that

this

money would never come back to the society again.

On the other hand

, if we started purchasing it from local vendors the money would circulate in

local community

Suggestion

the local community

local communities

and

subsequently

it can boost the

country

Suggestion

country's

economy. The

second

issue is that; the end buyer will have to spend

fortune

Suggestion

a fortune

fortunes

of amount in buying their needs. What I mean here is, will increase the price of the MRP to cover their losses in building the malls and to gain the maximum profit. Wherein the other hand,

this

won’t be the case with local vendors, because they don’t sale for

profits

Suggestion

the profits

they sale to survive.

For example

, if we are buying an apple from the malls that would cost around $5, but we can purchase the same apple for $2-$3 from local shops. At the end of the day, if we compare all the

product

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products

the buyer will be at loss and at the same time the local vendor too. The only one who get benefited from

this

corporate

companies

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company

. I strongly condemn

this

new trend and urge the people to start

consider

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considering

the local buyers

instead

of purchasing it from malls.

Also

, I request government to take steps to promote and help local shopkeepers.

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Topic Vocabulary:

community character
specialized products
homogenized
local economy
circulating
variety
convenient
social hubs
infrastructure
traffic congestion
pollution
energy consumption

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In recent years, many small shops have closed because customers travel to large shopping centers or malls to do their shopping Is this a positive or a negative development?

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Some people say that music is a good way of bringing people of differen cultures and ages toghether. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

Some people find advertisements amusing or annoying and they are not influenced by this when they shop. To what extend do you agree or disagree.

In many countries governments are investing in new technology to deal with the public. Why is this happening? Do you think his is an appropriate use of government money?