Some people think that money is one of the most essential factors in promoting happiness. Do you think people can be happy without much money? what other factors contribute towards happiness?

Money
plays a significant role in people's
life
. But
money
cannot buy all the
happiness
. In my opinion, even with less
money
, an individual can lead a joyful
life
, and there are various other aspects that lead to
happiness
.
To begin
with, some copious people live below poverty
life
. Their earnings are comparatively lesser than many, but still, they lead a happy
life
.
Money
is required for fulfilling the basic needs, but it does not mean that the higher you earn more
happiness
.
For example
, celebrities earn millions, but in the news, we hear the miserable family
life
they lead. Most of them have broken marriages, have more tension, stress and so on. In spite of earning more
money
, they find it hard to get
happiness
in their
life
.
On the other hand
, there are other aspects of
life
where
happiness
can be found. Family and friends are the most essential aspect that an individual should treasure in his
life
. Whenever a person is having any problem in his
life
, he can approach his friends and family for any support. A person can be joyful when he is out with his partner and children. Leading a proper family
life
can be the most cheerful moment in any person's
life
.
For example
, in a recent interview
by
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with
a CEO of a top
MNC said
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MNC, said
that he hardly spends time with his family and friends and have forgotten when he had a happy moment
last
. Despite having a huge bank balance, he regrets that he has not spent any happy moments with his family and friends. To conclude,
money
is needed to take care of one's basic
necessity but
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necessity, but
losing family and friends to earn more
money
can prove a wrong decision in
life
.
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