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Many companies use advertisements to increase sales. What are the main reasons to make an advertisement effective? Is it a good thing or a bad thing to the society?

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Without a doubt, companies, nowadays, are exploring every possible way to
upsell
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 their products and to raise their revenue, and advertisements are one of the most proven strategy.
Yet executing
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Yet, executing
 an advertisement effectively is not an easy task as it depends on several considerations. I will discuss these statements before commenting whether it's a positive or negative development
to
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of
 society in my essay below. There are various things to consider before it proves
effectiveness
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effective
.
Firstly
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,
public
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the public
 often finds it interesting if they feel the usefulness of the product.
For instance
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, a machine with less cooking time and effort are more likely to attract large viewers than
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anything
 about a tobacco related stuff.
Secondly
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, public awareness plays an important factor as well.
For example
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, people often have the tendency to view or listen if they were made up of
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 gods or popular figures.
what
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What
 I mean to say is popular figures
such
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 as Sachin Tendulkar, Dhoni, or any other professionals would make a big impact on the consciousness more than a local hero. Most adds motivate an individual to do the right thing. If well presented they
often sends
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often send
 a positive message that would be better for both parties.
In addition
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, a small video description will convey a lot more than an individual presentation. All in all, Advertisements if designed carefully with supervision and executable strategies would benefit both consumers and suppliers and would have a positive impact on society as well.
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