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It is important to teach children to protect the environment as it is to teach them to read and write . To what extent do you agree with this statement ? Give reasons for your answers and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experiences .

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Protecting the
environment
 became one of the major
goal
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goals
 in recent days
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 Educating the children to protect the
environment
 as significant as
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 teach them to read and write
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 I strongly agree with
this
 statement and I will examine my point of view in
this
 essay. Admittedly
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 that the reading and writing
has the
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has, the
 more
importance
 to the individual development rather than the environmental protection studies
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 Despite the
importance
 of
learn
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learning
 to read and write
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 environmental issues
also
 taken seriously by every citizen
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 who lives in the
environment
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However
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the school curriculum has environmental studies for all the
grades but
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grades, but
 learner’s only learn them to score high marks in test
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 If we make them to understand more about the
importance
 of environmental studies as we motivate them
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to
 read and write
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 there would be a tremendous change in our society and our country
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Firstly
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 the mentors should have the insight of environmental protection ideas related to their lessons and the scholars should taught about the protection of the
environment
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 according to their age
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For instance
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 the science facilitator can
emphasis
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emphasize
 the
importance
 of
environment
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the environment
 and can make them to do pragmatic activities
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 suitable
to
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for
 the lesson and their grade
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Secondly
 the school can arrange campaigns for the Lerner’s to learn more about the existing perilous environmental issues like global warming
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Finally
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 teachers should discuss
deeply
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deep
 things like pollution and their effects towards their planet and how they can hamper
this
 situation
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 These are the basic environmental erudition
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 which create an immense impact on saving earth among the students
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 In conclusion
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 we can develop ourself a lot if we learn
properly how to read
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how to properly read
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in order to; used instead of "to", especially after try, come, go
and
write but
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write, but
 improving ourself alone will not provide us a successful life where we don’t have a pollution free
environment
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 in which only we have a
live
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life
 to run. Educating your children is as important as saving our planet
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 where only the human race can
exist
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exist, this can
this
 can done by educating them
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 how to protect their
environment
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