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Some people believe that personal happiness is directly related to economic success, Others believe that there are other factors. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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on the other
hand some
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hand, some
holds
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hold
 the view that other components
also
 depends on
this
. I believe that both are important on their own ends.
Firstly
,
nowadaysfor
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nowadays for
 successful
life
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involving financial matters
financial
strongness
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strangeness
 is
major thing
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a major thing
the major thing
.
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As
, the status of a
person
 depends on economic strength.
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 instance, if
person
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a person
the person
 is
fianacially
from a financial point of view
financially
 strong can afford all facilities of
life
 as compare to
economical weak
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the economical weak person
economical weak people
an economical weak person
person
 who only can think of
this
. The main problem of
this
 era is status apart from other things like ethics and values.
Furthermore
, money itself
doesnot
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does not
 make a significant difference in happiness. In the main while the other components like health, friends and family interaction. Health is
also
 major thing
,
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,
if
person unhealthy
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a person unhealthy person
the person unhealthy person
person
 is not
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healthy, then
healthy then
then
 the
life
 will be upset. In
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a position or opinion or judgment reached after consideration
conclusion
 of
this
 both the points are equally important money, happiness and mental satisfaction are interrelated with each other. Health and
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wealth are both
wealth both are
what both are
health both are
 necessary for spending
life
.
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