crime appears to be rising in most countries in the world, especially among young people. Identify the possible causes of this trend, and propose some solutions you think would be effective.

It has appeared that the rate of criminal acts found among the youth as increased in leaps and bounds in the nationals of the world. The causes of
this
plural of "this"
these
appear to be focused on two
area
Suggestion
areas
, and a number of solutions are possible. On one hand, lack of parent
up bringing
properties acquired during a person's formative years
upbringing
of their children.
This
go
Suggestion
goes
is going
a long way in their behaviour at home and the societies at large.
Most crime
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Most criminals
committed by the young one today are traceable to their up
bring
the state or fact of existing
being
boring
. Another cause is the failure of the government in policies making that will take the youth out of the street.
This
can be seen in
area
Suggestion
the area
where adolescents are unemployed nothing take their precious time which they have used to perpetuate dubious acts that had inflated the countries of the world. Turning to the possible solutions, obvious step would be taken by parent to restore moral values to their children.
This
can go a long way of crime reduction. Youth should be train
on
Suggestion
of
the consequences that follow those involve in criminal acts. A
second
remedy might be for the states should look into the policies that they are making. They might consider implementing laws that would control the use of their devices (animation), make
rooms
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room
for jobs creation for the youth. In conclusion, factors of poor
parents
Suggestion
parent
training and
in ability
lack of ability (especially mental ability) to do something
inability
of the government to make proper policies for the young one appear to be the main causes. A coordinated response by the parents and states might be a
well
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good
lessen
a unit of instruction
lesson
to the severity of the situation.
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