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It is now possible for scientists and tourists to travel to remote natural environment, such as the South Pole. What are advantages and disadvantages of this development?

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Nowadays, there are more and more abilities to
travel
 not only for scientists but
also
 for tourists. Different
travel
 companies offer new journeys to some places with A faraway natural environment.
This
 essay will examine the advantages and disadvantages of
such
 experience with some examples from real life. The two main advantages of these trips are the ability to see the UNUSUAL
nature
 itself and to back off from daily business and take some rest.
Firstly
, these days it is very hard to find some places with untouched
nature
. Trips to locations like THE South Pole give a feeling of uniqueness and unforgettable landscapes.
Secondly
,
such
 journeys allow US to put off all stuff and be with a
nature
 one on one. People there can set aside all gadgets and just enjoy the
nature
 itself.
However
,
such
 tourism
also
 has some major disadvantages. To start with,
such
travel
 is very expensive. From my own experience, most of these trips are only available in
travel
 companies which usually offer packs of one or two weeks which inevitably leads to high costs.
Moreover
, these places are located very far from the majority of localities, and, as a consequence, the prices for transport are
also
 very high.
Secondly
, new
possibilities to
Accept comma addition
possibilities, to
travel
 increase the number of tourists.
As a result
,
such
 places lose their uniqueness and, at some point, become
usual
Suggestion
usually
 with a large stream of tourists daily. To conclude,
although
this
 development opens new abilities to
travel
, it has a negative effect to the environment, and our planet loses unaffected areas. I believe that
this
 journey expansion will not do much damage to our
nature
.
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