It is often said that government spend too much money on projects to protect wildlife, while there are other problems that are more important ? Do you agree or disagree

Government
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The government
is pumping a large amount of their budget into wildlife
conservation where as
Accept comma addition
conservation, whereas
conservation whereas
there are other important issues
also
. I agree to
this
as it is certainly pivotal
for
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in
saving our mother nature,
this
is shown in below mentioned essay.
Firstly
, many animals
are coming
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is coming
under endangered species criteria if they were not saved it will unbalance our ecosystem. For an instance,
number
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the number
of tigers in Indian forests
were taking
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took
a dip in
last years but
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the last years, but
the last years but
government
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the government
took some major steps and initiated big campaigns on the name of tiger conservation which helped in improving the count of tigers in
jungle
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the jungle
.
Secondly
, land encroachment is
also
one of the major issues for which
government
has to put up more money. Some people
starts
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start
are starting
have started
living in
forest
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the forest
forests
a forest
and they hunt wild animals for their food
,
Accept space
,
cut plants to make their place livable
.
Accept space
.
If they are asked to leave the place, from
government they
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the government, they
the government they
demand monetary compensation or land to survive.
Lastly
, due to
resorts
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the resorts
and tracks built in
middle
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the middle
of the jungle problems
are cropping
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is cropping
up
such
as tracking grouping unknowingly destroys major medicinal plants under their foot trail. At night time, they set up bonfire which
may led
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may lead
to a devastating situation if
fire
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the fire
spread all over the
forest
. To curb
such
incidents
government
made some jungles as national
forest
and deployed staff on its payroll for safeguarding of
forest
. To conclude, I do admit
government
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the government
is spending a lot on wildlife
conservational
an occurrence of improvement by virtue of preventing loss or injury or other change
conservation
projects
,
Accept space
,
but it is necessary for
sustainable future
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a sustainable future
.
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