In most developed countries shopping is not only about buying the goods you need, it is also perceived as entertainment. Is it a positive or negative development? Give your own opinion and examples based on your experience

Some people argue that for the modern nations, shopping is not a mundane activity to purchase amenities of
life whereas
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life, whereas
it is considered an amusement because everyone can afford buying expensive products with
cards in these countries
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I personally believe that purchasing items for gratification and satisfaction has plagued the financial security as well as caused a great deal of psychiatric disorders among the shoppers.
, it is certainly true that in
developed world
the developed world
, citizens
easy access to
cards which can help them to purchase whatever they want.
convenient and enjoyable shopping leads to the imbalance between the earnings and expenditures. It is the primary factor responsible for an enormous amount of debts on individuals,
of compulsive buying.
convenient, it costs a huge interest rate to the consumers.In England,
for instance
, 90% of the
card holders described in a survey that they spend 5000-8000£ per year for shopping which is the sole reason for their increasing loans from the banks.
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the growing number of psychiatric illness has been documented among people who tend to buy just for happiness.Their labial emotions drive them to purchase items they do not require because they cannot resist the urge to buy more.
In addition
, obsessive compulsive disorders are prevalent in people who are easily influenced by
and commercials which motivate people to spend money on their products.In America a study conducted by
National Mental Health department
the National Mental Health department
, found that 80% of
the people
suffering from major depressive disorders and generalized anxiety disorders are spending their money for shopping useless items in order to lower their stress levels temporarily. In conclusion, I feel that
development of consumerism has caused financial and psychological problems to the mankind.
, effective measures should be taken to reduce its hazardous effects on humans.
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