Some people think that parents should teach children how to be good members of society.Others,however,believe that school is the place to learn this.Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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Incorporating good manners in children plays a pivotal role in producing useful members of society.Some people are of the view that parents should be the ones contributing to their children being noble representatives of community

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others think schools hold

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the first place

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I disagree with the idea of schools solely having

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the responsibility

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mentors contribute to

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as kids spend more time at home

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they assimilate more of that they observe in their guardian’s behaviour.

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due to plenty of students at school

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each one is not subjected to the required focus.

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the University

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it was found that 90% of habits of children

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four years of life

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which are spent at home

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I opine with the idea of parents being the major influence in turning their offsprings into worthy individuals of a set-up.Because

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kids have maximum learning abilities in their early years of life.They imitate whatever they see

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guardians should be very vigilant in training their babies.Owing to the strong emotional affiliation as well as strong bonding kids hold with their

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I urge parents to focus more on upbringing of their offsprings.

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Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

6.5

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

287 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

good members of society
teach
parents
schools
responsibility
values
respect
empathy
responsibility
formal education
citizenship
ethics
social responsibility
lead by example
role models
conducive environment
extracurricular activities
community involvement
collaborate
holistic approach

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Some people think that parents should teach children how to be good members of society.Others,however,believe that school is the place to learn this.Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

Fully explain your ideas

It has become easier and more affordable for people to travel to other coutries. Do you think it is a positive or a negative development? Give your opinion and relevant examples from your experience

Some children spend hours every day on their smartphones.

Some people say that advertising is extremely successful at persuading us to buy things. Other people think that advertising is so common that we no longer pay attendtion to it. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Some people prefer working in a group while others work alone. Discuss both sides.

Some believed in many countries, the investment of public in arts can be justified. Others thinks that government should spend more on health and education. Discuss both views and give your opinion.