Some people think that parents should teach children how to be good members of society.Others,however,believe that school is the place to learn this.Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

Incorporating good manners in children plays a pivotal role in producing useful members of society.Some people are of the view that parents should be the ones contributing to their children being noble representatives of community
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however
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others think schools hold
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discussed, concluding
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the first place
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I disagree with the idea of schools solely having
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the responsibility
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mentors contribute to
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task, but
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as kids spend more time at home
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they assimilate more of that they observe in their guardian’s behaviour.
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due to plenty of students at school
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each one is not subjected to the required focus.
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In a research held at
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the University
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it was found that 90% of habits of children
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is developed
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which are spent at home
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the opinion of schools being less accountable for
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I opine with the idea of parents being the major influence in turning their offsprings into worthy individuals of a set-up.Because
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kids have maximum learning abilities in their early years of life.They imitate whatever they see
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guardians should be very vigilant in training their babies.Owing to the strong emotional affiliation as well as strong bonding kids hold with their
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parents, they
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a maximum
the maximum
of stuff which they are offered in their elder’s behaviour.To
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conclude, I
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the viewpoint of parents playing
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a pivotal role
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I urge parents to focus more on upbringing of their offsprings.
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