Some people think that all teenagers should be required to do unpaid work in their free time to help the local community. They believe this would benefit both the individual teenager and society as a whole. Do you agree or disagree?

Volunteer works are known as one of the most common
activity
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activities
that students would easily attend and contribute their
values
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value
to society,
for instance
planting trees in the around
school
's backyard.
However
, I totally disagree that we should not require students to do unpaid work in their free
time
to help
local community
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the local community
or in
school
.
Firstly
, the crucial roles of students in
school
are absorbing knowledge from their teachers and applying into future jobs.
Moreover
, students are encouraged to enjoy their free
time
with their friends and family, it would help them to develop perfectly.
Nonetheless
, they have to study all day and deal with very high pressure about their homework and examination. It would not be
good idea
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a good idea
to oblige all students to do help community without paying any fee. The volunteer jobs should be a recommendation and motivating other students
work
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to work
together in order to find and expand their
network relationship
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relationship network
.
Secondly
, students are deserved to work for being paid. It would be ridiculous to exploiting student's labour for doing
comuunity
a group of people living in a particular local area
community
jobs without
given
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giving
any money. Case in point, I had an experience in high
school
that forcing to help
planting
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plant
trees in
school's backyard
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the school's backyard
without asking any permission from
students
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the students
. It caused
that all of students
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that all students
at that
time
felt like annoying because of using their free
time
on the weekend to do
such
boring tasks that they did not want to do anymore. In
conlusion
a position or opinion or judgment reached after consideration
conclusion
, organizing and motivating student to attend local community or volunteer jobs are very good to help students easily make friends.
However
, it should not be the obligation tasks
to
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for
all students that have no willing to do.
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