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some people say that the Government should not put money on building theaters and sports stadium. Others say that they should spend more money on medical care and education. Discuss both views and give your opinion

#people #government #money #theaters #sports #stadium #care #education
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this
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i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
 am going to discuss the importance of
theaters
a building where theatrical performances or motion-picture shows can be presented
theatre
 and
stadium
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 in public
life
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 and their impact on people's daily
life
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.
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hand i
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hand, I
hand I
 am
also
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 going to compare the importance of medical
care
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 and
education
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 in public build up and give my suggestion
in
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on
 what part the government should spend more funds which ultimately is beneficial for the healthy
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life style
a manner of living that reflects the person's values and attitudes
lifestyle
 of their
nation
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.
Theaters
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Theatre
 and sports
stadium
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 are sources of leisure for people from their hectic daily routines and are necessary for sound mind and
health
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 of the
nation
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, as most working proportion of people need
this
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 kind of leisure after worrisome weekly routine so they play a very basic role in
community
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the community
. Some people say that the government should put more
money
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 on building
theaters
a building where theatrical performances or motion-picture shows can be presented
theatre
theatres
 and
stadium
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 and
other
any of various alternatives; some other
another
 say that they should spend more
money
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 medical and
education
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.In my opinion
theaters
a building where theatrical performances or motion-picture shows can be presented
theatres
 and sports play
critical role
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a critical role
 in daily
life
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.
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.
Theaters
Suggestion
Theatres
 are means of recreation and
hangouts for
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hangouts, for
 families and friends at the same time the play important role in economy building of
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nation
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a nation
the nation
.
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.
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Similarly sports
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Similarly, sports
stadium
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are
Suggestion
is
 necessary for development of minds
.
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.
 According to my opinion if you want to know
mental level
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the mental level
 of people of certain area you can take idea from the
contion
everything that is included in a collection and that is held or included in something
content
 of their sports stadiums so
goverment
the organization that is the governing authority of a political unit
government
 should spend some portion of
money
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 on
theaters
a building where theatrical performances or motion-picture shows can be presented
theatre
 and
stadium
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lookin
Suggestion
Looking
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 on the other side of the story medical
care
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 and
education
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 is the basic necessity of people
with out
in absence of
without
education
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 and
health
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 the survival if a
nation
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 is in danger
.
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.
Good medical
care
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 and
education
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 can make a
nation
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 prosperous and bring them into
compition
a business relation in which two parties compete to gain customers
competition
 with the other nations.If we look to the developed
nations we
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nations, we
 infer that they provided their
nation
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 with
best
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better
education
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 and
best medical
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the best medical care
care
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.
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.
Forexample
Suggestion
For example
 USA spends 6 percent of their budget
in
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on
health
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 and a big share on
education
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on the other
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hand we
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hand, we
here
perceive (sound) via the auditory sense
hear
 in
pakistan
a Muslim republic that occupies the heartland of ancient south Asian civilization in the Indus River valley; formerly part of India; achieved independence from the United Kingdom in 1947
Pakistan
 spend a very low amount on
education
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 and
health
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 so we are not developing our
nation
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.
in
Suggestion
In
 my
opinion there
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opinion, there
shoud
expresses an emotional, practical, or other reason for doing something
should
 be a balance in spending
money
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 on both aspects
.
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.
Both are necessary for the ultimate progress and heath of
nation
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 so government should spend
money
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 equally on both
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