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School teachers are more responsible for social and intellectual development of student than parents. To what extent do yo agree or disagree?

#school #teachers #development #student #parents #yo
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Mentor plays a vital role in every
person
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’s
life
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 to develop their internal abilities as well as give guidance to stand in a
society
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 as a good civil
person
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. Both the parents and teachers contribute equally to make a learner a better
person
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. To embark with, pupil
devote
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devotes
 maximum time in
school
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 premises in order to learn under the guidance of
a
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an
 instructor; by learning and getting appropriate path a learner can get a respectable position in
society
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. A survey conducted by
government
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the government
 reveals that a
school
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 which
has best teachers have
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has best teachers had
have best teachers had
has best teachers have
 more students who become a successful
person
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,
such
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 as doctor, architecture and
engineer
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engineering
.
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, a child can develop his mental abilities by getting clarification about study topics as well as
life
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 from a facilitator, which would increase his aptitude power.
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, it will not only help in
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school but
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school, but
also
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 in future
life
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.
For example
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, in college and job interviews. Due to exceptional guidance at
school
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 level,
student
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students
the student
a student
 can
further
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 expand their skills which will enhance their confidence level.
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, in the beginning of a
life
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, parents are the only mentor for a kid, who shows him
a
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an
 appropriate path towards
life
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 and make him a better learner and prepare him to become a good student.
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, they
also
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 increase understanding abilities of a peer by involving them in small activities,
such
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 as, block making, playing with educational toys and chess. Owing to
this
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 a child gets prepared to understand the tough syllabus at
school
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 and get ready to face the
society
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 with full confidence. In conclusion, parents can teach a kid beginning lesson of a
life
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 to make him stand in
society
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.
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, a teacher guides a student in a proper manner and give appropriate direction to become mentally
more stronger
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stronger
 as well as socially so that he can stand in a
society
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 as a better civil
person
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.
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