Some people claim that there are more disadvantages of the car than its advantages. Do you agree or disagree? Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of having a car.

In our lives, we travel from one place to another for a great variety of reasons and while travelling we greatly depend on cars, whether it is a private
car
or a public bus. The number of
car
owners is increasing every day because every person expects the freedom to travel and comfort while travelling. And
that is
why most of us want to own a
car
.
However owning
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However, owning
a
car
have many advantages and disadvantages as well. The main advantage of owning a
car
is it gives the freedom to travel. If you have a
car
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car, then
then
you don't need to be limited to fixed routes and timetables.
Moreover
, a
car
-owner can take is/her family members with him/her and other necessary goods whenever he/she
wish
Suggestion
wishes
which might have been impossible
otherwise
.
In addition
, personal cars give comfort while travelling
on the
contrary to
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contrary, to
the public buses which are so crowded and disgusting. You can read books, listen to music or even can play with kids while you are in your own
car but
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car, but
those
denotes a person or thing
this
all seems to be impossible in a public transport.
On the contrary
, owning a
car
is very expensive. The price of the
car
, the
cost
of the tax, insurance
cost
, fuel
cost
, driver's salary,
car
repairing etc.
all
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All
must be considered before buying a
car
and
that is
why it is out of reach of the middle-class people.
Moreover
, private cars can not carry many passengers at a time yet occupy spaces in the street. As the number of cars is increasing in the road so does the traffic jam. Perhaps the major disadvantage of cars, in general, is the huge damage they do to the human health and to the environment. More cars mean more pollution. The
environment
Suggestion
environmental
pollution is a serious issue today and at any
cost
, we must reduce the amount of pollution and if we consider it
then
owning a
car
is never a good idea. To sum up, having a
car
gives someone
freedom but
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freedom, but
if
public transportation system
Suggestion
the public transportation system
is easily accessible, safe and efficient,
then
the idea of buying and owning a
car
should be abandoned.
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