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Q- Some people think that environmental problems should be solved on a global scale while others believe it is better to deal with them nationally Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

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While it is often believed that governments ought to cooperate to solve the environmental issues, others think that these problems must be solved domestically. In my opinion, I believe that tackling these issues in a worldwide way can have better advantages on both the globe and individual countries. On the one hand, some people consider that trying to solve the environmental problems on the worldwide scale can have better solutions for these problems than the individual solutions and I agree.
In other words
, when the governments work together to deal with any issue that one
country
 faces, they will utilize all the resources they have to find out the proper solution to
this
 issue;
consequently
, their effect on
this
 problem will be greater than the effect of only one
country
.
For example
, when Indonesia faced the catastrophe of tsunami in 2005, all the nations around the world cooperated together to save many people's lives which they could not save them with their own facilities.
On the other hand
, other people say that focusing on the local environmental problems only may have more benefits to the
country
 itself.
This
 is because there are some global environmental problems which cannot have any influence on
some
one or some or every or all without specification
any
 countries at all
then
 it will be
waste
Suggestion
a waste
for
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of
 time and money
for
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to
 the governments of these countries to deal with these problems.
For instance
, if the
country
 is not surrounded by any seas at all, they will not be affected by the melting polar caps which derived from the issue of global warming.
Therefore
, it will be better for these countries
to focus
Suggestion
focus
 on the environmental issues that hinder them locally. In conclusion, while some say that environmental problems should be solved nationally, I believe that there are more benefits for the world and countries themselves to deal with these problems on
worldwide scale
Suggestion
a worldwide scale
.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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