Successful sports professionals can earn a great deal more money than people in other important professions. Some people think this is fully justified while others think it is unfair. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Sports celebrities have higher income than those of other significant careers. Many individuals believe that
this
is logical while other people and I think that
this
is inequitable and I will justify that in
this
essay. Nowadays, many sports have become a profitable business rather than being an entertainment. Basically, these sports have a wide base of followers and fans which has constituted a great chance to be seized by marketing departments in many companies. They used to promote their products using the athletics as advertisers or even via putting their trademark on the latter’s sport garments.
For instance
, companies like Nike and Adidas spend
anually
without missing a year
annually
millions of dollars sponsoring many sports clubs just to promote their products and garments under the name of these clubs. These expended monies are thought by some to be the cause of
high salaries
Suggestion
the high salaries
of sports celebrities.
On the other hand
, there are many other careers like teaching, engineering and medicine that are of higher value and influence in the society. The owners of these professions should have the priority in terms of salaries and rewards in order to be satisfied and motivated to exert more effort.
This
is mainly because these jobs are life-saving in many cases, so as much as those professionals got awarded, as best results we gain from them.
This
is already applied in many developed countries like
United States
Suggestion
the United States
and Canada where doctors and lawyers are well paid,
as a result
the medical system in these countries is one of the best in all the world. In conclusion, some people believe that the justification
the high
Suggestion
the higher
higher
income of many famous players is due to the revenue of sponsorship of many marketing companies to their clubs which makes it normal to have
such
salaries.
However
, I argue that
this
is not a
suffecient
of a quantity that can fulfill a need or requirement but without being abundant
sufficient
excuse for these high incomes and there are many other professionals,
such
as doctors, tutors and engineers, in the society that deserve equal wages or even higher
,
Accept space
,
because of their pivotal role and influence in the society.
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