There is an increasing number of people who do not know their neighbor. What causes this situation? How to solve it? Give your own idea.

In
this
fast-pacing, technology based era, no doubt the globe had got shortened but, the number of the communities who remain ignorant about the nearby persons, is exaggerating rampantly. In
this
essay, I will discuss the leading factors of the present scenario and after that, I will suggest some of the feasible preventative measures to combat
this
circumstance.
To begin
, it might be stated that the economic standpoint plays very important role in creating the problem of social loneliness. Nowadays, the individual is becoming the workaholics to
fulfill
put in effect
fulfil
the basic amenities of life. As a vast majority of people, is inclined towards working for long hours,
hence
are not able to devote time even to their families. To illustrate, one of the recent study conducted by the nursing students reveals that, nearly 70% of
local population
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the local population
of that particular area was working for long duration of time to deal with their EMIs.
Moreover every
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Moreover, every
single individual had to stick with the fixed timetable for the sake of achieving the desired set of goals in life,
as a result
, they do not get the time for leisure activities. To exemplify, due to a bumper to bumper cars on the way, adults have to hit the roads early to beat the traffic.
Additionally
, the foremost increasing trend of nuclear families is the cornerstone to the prevailing condition of isolation.
For instance
, in previous times people used to celebrate the social gatherings due to
strong ties
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the strong ties
of joint families and good interpersonal relationship within the society. Obviously, the solution to the problem is certainly not easy, but certain measures can be taken on
societal level
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a societal level
the societal level
. Due to
serious nature
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the serious nature
of social separation, it becomes obligatory on the part of owners of modern residential colonies to arrange some cultural
activities namely
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activities, namely
spring
fest
a ceremonial dinner party for many people
feast
,
celebration
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a celebration
of traditional festivals within the premises, which tends to unite the native persons of that particular locality. One clear example to state, is the local television serial known as, “Tarak Mehta ka Ulta Chashma” on SAB TV is emphasizing the importance of social ties.
Furthermore
, the families should be encouraged to stay along with the elderly parents, which tends to enhance the power of maintaining good relations.
Finally
, to sum up, I would like to say that maintaining financial backup, career oriented progress and staying separately away from parents are the main reasons for seclusion and conducting
variety
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a variety
of events
,
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,
extended families are some of
the strong
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the strongest
steps which can be taken to deal with
situation
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the situation
situations
a situation
.
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