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Education is not a luxury, but a basic human right and as such should be free for everyone irrespective of personal wealth. Do you agree or disagree?

#education #luxury #right #wealth
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Since ancient times,
education
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has been playing
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has played
 an important role in the development of the society. But unfortunately, these days it has become expensive and
unaffordable
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 to millions of people across the world. I completely agree with the given statement, knowledge should be free and accessible to each and every person on the planet.
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 of all, modern way of life is knowledge driven, without which, it would be very difficult to survive in the advanced society. Free
education
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 gives every individual a fair and valuable opportunity to excel in the life because lack of affordable schooling will have a detrimental effect on the human development, it might lead to poverty, loss of jobs and corruption.
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, many industrialized countries have one thing in common,
that is
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 high literacy rate. In most of these states, schooling is the basic right and it is free for all. So, I believe, free
education
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 will show a huge positive impact in the people’s standard of living.
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, since the
education
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 has tremendous importance in the human lives, it is directly related to
country’s development
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the country’s development
a country’s development
. Providing free and quality training
to
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of
 the younger generation will lead to the innovation and
employment and
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employment, and
 that in turn increases the wealth in the country.
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, 50 years ago, India was one of the poorest countries on earth with
mere 30%
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the mere 30 %
a mere 30 %
 of the total population were literate. In
later half
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the later half
 of the 20th century,
education
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 was made a basic human right in the country. Fast forward to the 21st century, India is poised to become 3rd largest economy in the
next
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 decade. To conclude,
education
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 should not be just for
privileged
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the privileged
, it should be free for all, irrespective
to
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of
 the cast, creed and the religion.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • fundamental right
  • accessible
  • social mobility
  • personal and professional development
  • overall development
  • equality
  • social disparities
  • access
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