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Some say you should always marry for love; others say that in an uncertain world it's wiser to marry for money. Discuss both points of view and give your own opinion.

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In many nations, both developed and developing countries, marriages are pivotal moments for individuals and societies.
Therefore
, it is worthy to question whether financial or sentimental reasons should lead the nuptial choice. In the following essay, I will consider both sides of
this
 issue as well as give my opinion. On the one hand, it is considered by some that money-based unions benefit new couples since many communities are experiencing welfare uncertainty.
In other words
, the incumbencies of newly married people are greatly reduced when they can rely on solid founds. By instance, buying or renting
an
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a
 house and paying taxes or school fees for children are much less a burden for husband and
wifes
a married woman; a man's partner in marriage
wife
 with secure assets. Taking Italy as an example, most recent research shows that in the
last
 few
decades nearly
Accept comma addition
decades, nearly
 all Italians have married for
love
.
As a result
, most Italian families struggle to make a living and are overwhelmed by
wealth
a healthy state of wellbeing free from disease
health
 problems.
On the other hand
, I would argue that
love
 should be the only leading force for legal joinings. As described by writers and poets and experienced by many, it goes without saying that living with the beloved one brings happiness. By way of illustration, several serum hormonal
analysis
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analyses
 have demonstrated that
couple
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a couple
the couple
couples
 in
love
 have higher level of prolactin hormone if compared with the
avarage
approximating the statistical norm or average or expected value
average
 of the population. Defined by scientists as the "chemical of joy", prolactin inhibits the level of cortisol
also
 called "the stress hormone".
This
 means that marring for
love
 not only gives joy, but
also
 reduce the stress and,
consequently
, might help to face the daily life challenges. In summary, both sides seem to have sound arguments.
However
, I am of the opinion that people should always marry for
love
.
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