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People living in large cities have to face many problems in everyday life. What are those problems? Should the government encourage people to move to regional towns?

#people #cities #face #life #government #move #towns
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It is often argued that people have to deal with many issues when living in big cities. Two main problems are
air
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 pollution and petty
crime
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 because they really affect the quality of people’s lives. To my mind, those people should be encouraged to move to regional areas. The increase in the amount of polluted
air
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 recently has created huge concerns of people in big cities. Due to
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traffic, tram
, motored engines
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 as bikes and cars are likely to release more smoke and gas which decrease the
air
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 quality.
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, people feel unpleasant and find hardly to breath when participating in
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the transportation
.
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, they can easily get health problems
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 as lung diseases.
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, petty
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such
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 as stealing phones or wallet, especially on the bus, is
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 a considerable issue that needs to be taken down.
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, it makes residents feel insecure and it leads to a terrible issue about trust between the state and the citizens.
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, it eliminates the stability of the society. To address
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to
 these problems, the government should find some way to attract people
move
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to move
 to other towns.
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 of all, it definitely will reduce the number of vehicles in the cities, which improve the
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 quality and save people’s time.
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, they can spend more time to recharge their batteries so they can feel
more happier
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happier
 and more comfortable to work.
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, it is easier for
government
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the government
 to manage the reasonable number of citizens so that they can prevent
crime
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 happening. In conclusion,
air
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 pollution and petty
crime
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 certainly are well-known problems in big cities and there is no doubt that the government should encourage the citizens relocate to other areas to live.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • urban congestion
  • traffic jams
  • lengthy commutes
  • high cost of living
  • financial strain
  • air pollution
  • noise pollution
  • quality of life
  • green space
  • recreational areas
  • social isolation
  • fast-paced lifestyle
  • public services strain
  • overpopulation
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