Some people believe that there should be fixed punishments for each type of crime. Others, however, argue that the circumstances of an individual crime, and the motivation for committing it, should always be taken into account when deciding on the punishment. Discuss both the views and give your own opinion.

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The number of crimes
are increasing
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is increasing
day by day in every country because those people who committed
crime
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do not have a feeling of fear, they think they will be
rescue
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rescued
from the jail by giving money to the advocate and I strongly agree that there should be fixed punishment for each type of
crime
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because criminals will
think hundred of
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think a hundred
think a hundred of
times before
committe
perform an act, usually with a negative connotation
commit
committees
committed
any type of
crime
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. To embark, I believe that there should be a fixed
punishments
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punishment
for criminals
such
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as
death penality
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the death penalty
death penalty
and life imprisonment because
crime
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is likely to be
low
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lower
by
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,
for example
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, if there is a punishment of life imprisonment for a thief so he thinks thousand of times before stolen something. It will save a lot of time and money,
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, some cases take many years
to be solve
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to solve
and a plenty of money is wasted in it,
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, sometimes people do not even submit their report to the police because they think they are going to waste their time by go to the court
everyday
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every day
,
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, some people try to hide their problem because of
embarrasment
the shame you feel when your inadequacy or guilt is made public
embarrassment
and they know nothing is going to happen and they will not get justice.
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, some people believe that the circumstances of an individual
crime
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and the motivation for committing it should always be taken into account when deciding on the punishment becuse they think there is always be a compulsion behind every
crime
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, if we take an example of Bhagat Singh, a legend of India, who sacrifices his life for nation, he committed plethora of
crime
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for the independence of India so there was a big reason behind his every
crime
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,
therefore
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, they think circumstances should always be taken into account but I disagree with them because
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of a meaningful reason of Bhagat Singh for committing a
crime
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, he had to be a victim of death penalty because he was
also
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knew too that he is a criminal and he wanted nobody to do it what he did. To sum up, If we want to stop the increasing rate of
crime
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so we should take some steps and government should be strict and need to take high actions towards it.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • fixed punishments
  • consistency
  • predictability
  • deter crime
  • potential offenders
  • streamline
  • judicial process
  • bias
  • corruption
  • complexity
  • human behavior
  • circumstances
  • justice system
  • intent
  • remorse
  • socio-economic background
  • rehabilitate offenders
  • recidivism rates
  • flexible punishment systems
  • inconsistencies
  • perceived injustices
  • public trust
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