You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The graph below shows the number of enquiries received by the Tourist Information Office in one city over a six-month period in 2011. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.

The graph below shows the number of enquiries received by the Tourist Information Office in one city over a six-month period in 2011.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

You should write at least 150 words.
The
graph
shows the tourism information office
enquires
received in 2011 from
January
to
June
, comparing the
enquires
done “in person”, “by letter/email” and “by telephone”. The
graph
has a scale from 0 to 2,000 and
register
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how many
enquires
they had in each month divided by type. Observing the
graph
, we can see that
enquires
“in person” raised considerably during the six-month period. On
January
400
enquires
were registered and
on
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in
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June
, up to 2,000
enquires
were done in person, representing a 500% increase.
Enquires
by telephone
also
raised approximately 160% from
January
(1,000) to
June
(1,600), but
on the other hand
,
enquires
by telephone decreased
50
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by 50
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%, as we can see that 800
enquires
were done
on
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in
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January
and just 400
on
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in
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June
. Analyzing the
graph
, we can
also
note that the total amount of
enquires
increased quickly, approx. 2,000
enquires
were done
on
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in
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January
against 4,000
enquires
done
on
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in
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June
and that on February the three enquire types had a very similar demand, approx. 600 “in person”, 700 “by letter/e-mail” and 800 “by telephone”, and from March onwards they started to increase or decrease as reported above.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
Vocabulary: Replace the words graph, enquires, january, june, “by with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 3 times.
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