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Writing Samples
Band 7.5

You recently took a train journey but you left an important item on the train. You phoned the train company to report it but you were not pleased with the response. Write a letter to the manager of the train company. In your letter • describe the item you left on the train • say why you were not pleased with the train company's response to your phone call • explain what you want the manager to do about it

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Dear Sir or Madam, I was a recent passenger on your train, I was writing because I had left my important documents on your train.
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 9 pm on your train from Tehran to Shiraz. I had left my house contract in the yellow plastic bag. I was sitting in the third row of the second carriage near the window. I phoned the station as soon as I realized I had lost my plastic bag.
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, the lady, who answered the phone, was rude and impatient. She just took my number and hung up the phone. It is Friday now, and I have not received any call yet. I would suggest creating a website, which is checked regularly by your staff, for found and lost objects.
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, passengers could register their lost objects immediately, and if someone found something, she or she could post a notice on the site in order to find its owner. I look forward to your prompt response. Yours faithfully, Negar Sedigh

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task achievement
Ensure to fully explain why the company's response to your phone call was unsatisfactory by providing more details or examples.
coherence cohesion
Consider breaking down longer paragraphs into shorter ones to make it easier to follow your points.
coherence cohesion
The letter has a clear structure with a logical flow from describing the item to suggesting a solution.
task achievement
The tone is appropriate, respectful and formal, which fits well with the purpose of the letter.
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